Heaven is a place where nothing ever happens.

One difference between songwriting and scholarly essays is that we’re not allowed to repeat ourselves at the beginning of sentences just for the rhythm.

We say things best when we say things straight with minimal punctuation in sentences that drive directly to their point without detours or turning back. We say: Heaven is a place where nothing ever happens, instead of what David Byrne says in that Talking Heads song called “Heaven”:

Heaven,
Heaven is a place,
A place where nothing,
Nothing ever happens.

If your writing ever starts to repeat itself within sentences or in transitions to new paragraphs, taking a few steps backward before lurching one step forward, try to remember the simple beauty of “Heaven is a place where nothing ever happens.” And if I ever quote this line to you in comments, please remember what it means.

Another good example from the Foo Fighters:

All my life I’ve been searching for something,
Something never comes, never leads to nothing,
Nothing satisfies but I’m getting close,
Closer to the prize at the end of the rope.

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One Response to Heaven is a place where nothing ever happens.

  1. davidbdale says:

    Thanks for the “like,” Shannon. Stop by any time, and feel free to comment, please. My students will be happy to know their hard work has an audience outside our class.

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